We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some people think that we should not help people in other countries as long as there are problems in our own society. From my point of view, I completely disagree with this opinion because I believe that we should try to help as many people as possible to create a better world.
On the one hand, I accept that it is very vital to help our neighbor and fellow citizens. In most communities, there are people who are homeless because of not being affordable for their own accommodation or disadvantaged in some ways. For example, even in some wealthiest countries such as US or India, It is possible to find a huge number of slums on the outer of developed cities, and for those who are concerned about this problems, spending time for doing volunteer work or give money to support these people are best effective way to resolve it. In my city, we can help by doing a variety of activities from donating garment to serving free food to the poor and what we do can significantly improve our community quality. As a result, I can understand why some people feel that we should prioritize local charity.
On the contrary, I believe that we have an obligation to help those who live beyond our national borders. In some countries the problems which people need to face are much more serious than those in our communities, and it is often easier to help. For instance, when children are dying from curable diseases in African countries, governments and individuals in richer nations can saves lives simply by paying for vaccines that already exist. A small donation to an international charity might have a greater impact than helping in our local area.
For the above arguments, it is true that we can not save everyone but in my opinion, national boundaries should be opened to provide help to people who are in need all over the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
..., and for those who are concerned about this problems, spending time for doing volun...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'are the best'.
Suggestion: are the best
...k or give money to support these people are best effective way to resolve it. In my city...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68615384615 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6051383 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550769230769 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.1380356624 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.916666667 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0833333333 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310763311418 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118939000119 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716815885985 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203938715673 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523533736182 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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