We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Many people think that they should only help people in their country because they are not able to help everyone. However I think that they should take care of everybody that needs help although those people live in other countries.
On the one hand, almost people should help somebody in their country, specially the older people, disable people and orphaned children who really need the support from communities. They might face to many difficulties if they are not received the grants. Moreover, it is very easy to help and share because they live together in a country, the aid might be brought very fast. Besides that, we can contribute not only money but also food, clothes to make the poor have the better life. Many young people become a volunteer to take care of the older people and carry much happiness to children.
However, besides helping some people in our communities, we should also concern to many people in other countries, if they really need our help. For example, many people have to suffer to live in the war or the natural disasters. They lost much property and their beloved people, so they feel disappointed and bored. In that situation, we should encourage and support for them, help them overcome many losses. If everyone in other people do not concern them, they will exist in a difficult way.
All in all, I believe that we should help as many people as possible in both our country and other countries in difficult conditions. It will make the life become more beautifully.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion:
... and carry much happiness to children. However, besides helping some people in ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a difficult way" with adverb for "difficult"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, really, so, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1258.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83846153846 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37584927201 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515384615385 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9400746296 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8571428571 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199879410465 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789664312969 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716897821057 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141650301609 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415523878642 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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