We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages.
To what extent do you agree ?
Some people believe that internet could be dangerous to our secrecy and has many downsides over the benefits. In this essay, I would describe this opinion and give my own viewpoint.
To begin with, this might be true that our privacy could be disturbed because of internet. Everyone could access the internet as easy as pie, moreover by hackers. As we know, there are many people who takes photos from social media and edit them to become porn pictures then put them on the internet purposely. Usually, this is happened to famous person such as actors or public officials. Additionally, our enemy are not only the hackers, but the creator of the social media itself. This shown by Edward Snowden, the man who was an employee in the CIA revealed that all of our informations and activities are being watched by CIA or America’s government by the camera on the laptop or gadget. Perhaps, the social media companies let them to access our details.
However, we have to admit that the internet could changes our lives in many good things, even these could overweight the drawbacks. Firstly, although people do not have a place physically for selling, they could put their creations, used things, or goods in social media such as Facebook, because the citizens like to find any needs on the internet then order them directly more than go to the store. Secondly, the internet also affects people who are in travelling or staying in the oversea. It could help them if they hurt and they are looking for the hospital.
All in all, I completely disagree that people gain more disadvantages, because it could ease our activities such as finding information about the traffics, doctors and so on. Even though it could be unsafe for the security of our privacy, but it depends on the person to take care themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54575971076 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560897435897 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3744038943 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.533333333 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0727105621435 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261570686978 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256873612613 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0432934246544 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195619596093 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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