some people think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while others say that they should think more realistically about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People hold different views about whether youth should follow their passion or be more rational when looking for a job. From my standpoint, it will be wiser if they are given a chance to choose their own career.
On the one hand, choosing jobs pragmatically means people’s lives can be stabler and they do not need to worry about the future. They can work for state-owned corporations which provide more steady compensation such as income and retirement plans. Additionally, the structure is more organized so the risk of losing a job due to economic recession is very low compared to private companies. Another reason is it will be beneficial if they want to have a family. In the other words, young adults will become parents and have children to be taken care of. Moreover, living costs are getting more expensive. Thus, fresh graduates need to have permanent work that can cover their future.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that following passion for working can bring different satisfaction to themselves. This is because they can utilise their natural talents properly. Furthermore, this triggers them to be more excited at work. As a result, young adults can contribute significantly to something that they like without feeling forced. Another reason is millenials like to face challenges that match their passion. The more challenging the problem is, the more enthusiastic they are. In addition, various experiences will help them to be more resilient compared to people who like to play safe. For example, a lot of start-ups are emerging and managed by young people these days in Jakarta.
To sum up it is acceptable to work based on passion and skill at a young age. However, if it does not work out for more than 2 years, then they should make another plan.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94019933555 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69895882881 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591362126246 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9930738328 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.2631578947 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8421052632 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293202739248 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888157287032 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539017993544 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192884688013 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666197845885 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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