To what extent do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past”
Tied with the Technological Revolution was the rise of various forms of entertaining which is considered to be the catalyst for a new standard of living. Opponents to this view did ignite a debate about the paradoxes of happiness on human today despite the outstanding development in many fields of life. From my perspective, we are suffering a disappointing era rather than enjoying the world as we wish it to be.
On the one hand, the naked truth of how money influences on humans’ behaviors did turn out to be the mirror reflecting the erosion of humanity. On the economic front, it is "dollars for deeds" to claim the absolute dominance of money over our daily life. For example, there were numerous witnessed cases those who driven by the illusion of illegal prosperity did willingly gamble on their moral principles for a dream that never comes true. As the shipwreck men turning to seawater from uncontrollable thirst, many have died trying as the victims of an ever-changing era. Furthermore, as money serves as a servant, it owns an unexpected power to spread out kindness to every corner of our world. Otherwise, as a master, it would be an unbeatable monster which is willing to devour all the humans' dignity. It is the paradox of ever-changing society in which our happiness was stolen by our own symbol of prosperity - money.
On the other aspect, the fast-growing society has forced its young generation to shoulder the burden of expectations that could eventually cause the mental consequences. For instance, student, the most typical victim of the expectations from their parents, are drowning in an endless sea of unreasonable demands such as academic achievement, or family honor. As an inevitable result, those who choose suicide as a way to free themselves are reported to be mainly student living in strong economies like Korea and Japan. In addition, social network, one of the most symbolic things on 21st century, also exposes its own darkside by building mental prisons to bind us all. In fact, most of us did dwelt on cyberspace and forget to live.
In conclusion, an ever-changing world is a two-edged weapon whose line between supporting and destroying our world is so close. I firmly believe that the constant changes of the world did play an vital role in devouring humans’ happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...utstanding development in many fields of life. From my perspective, we are suffer...
^^
Line 3, column 805, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...ster which is willing to devour all the humans dignity. It is the paradox of ever-chan...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 696, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'dwell'
Suggestion: dwell
...to bind us all. In fact, most of us did dwelt on cyberspace and forget to live. In...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lt on cyberspace and forget to live. In conclusion, an ever-changing world is a...
^^
Line 7, column 194, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... constant changes of the world did play an vital role in devouring humans' ha...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02827763496 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99650903614 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606683804627 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.494993633 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.058823529 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115794288611 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357463602536 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290167575394 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722659985462 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345924695699 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.