Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past”
“After all, the world is flat”. It is the true that our world is changing tremendously whether we will it or not. Skeptics doubt that our happiness is going down despite the rise of innovation in many fields of life. From my point of view, such kinds of changes bring a fulfill happiness to humans.
In the first place, the idea of being happy even if we have to live in a circumstance that is lack of modern devices seems to be so strange. It is our basic instinct to question about everything. Dating back to the age of ancient Greek, countless philosophers had wonder about how our world function. Then they did invent a number of inventions that made our life more convenient. The curiosity is our box of pandorax. We did dream of flying under the azure sky, diving deeper and deeper beneath the ocean, or even more amazing to travel among the stars. We all know the story “the fall of Icarus”. It is not only a folk but also a mirror reflecting our desires. Indeed, we may not never break our limits or achieve the most insane dream without the support of technology. But we did success thanks to the change fueled by science. For example, the moment when the brothers of Wrights flew across the sky could be the happiest moment of mankind. Since we will be no longer pin our feet on the ground, we are on the way conquer our world. The world use to be a quiet place, filled with its simple happiness. However, it is never a satisfaction for human. In a new world, we could achieve the greater happiness.
On another aspect, the modern world in which we live could be considered a magician’s hat waiting us to explore. Nowadays, human could experience countless of activity that our ancestor could not even imagine. It is absolutely happy to travel around the world. We could experience the culture, people, and cuisine from every corner of our society. To our previous generations, these kinds of thoughts seem to be unbelievable. Skeptics doubt that the tremendous change could threat our core values. They blame globalization, a prime example of change, as the main reason to cause the humanity down. However, globalization is not a threat but a bless from technology. In fact, it facilitates the poor countries to speed up in path of innovation. For example, globalization has changed deeply the poverty, the racism, and the unbalance of sexes. That is the typical example of a world which is changing itself. I do believe that those who fear the unknowns will fear the changes. For changes is humans’ journey to fight against the ignorance. Motivated by our knowledge, it is deserved to believe that the world of changes facilitates human to achieve happiness in the highest level.
In conclusion, even the wind of change still has its dark side, it is unacceptable to declare that we could have a happier life in the past. I do trust in the benefits the changing world could bring to, that we have experienced a new happiness that never seen before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...on the way conquer our world. The world use to be a quiet place, filled with its si...
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...ever, globalization is not a threat but a bless from technology. In fact, it facilitate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, after all, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72900763359 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72098056104 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50572519084 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2487711237 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.8 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9714285714 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136144228838 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391587650313 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446835280089 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102497897496 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025641613613 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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