Most of the world's problems could be solved by international cooperation. Do you agree or disagree?
The globalization has conquering almost every corners of the known world, reversing the misconception of being divided. Human race is living in a flourish era which resulted in a utopian scenario that international collaboration could be the answer for almost the global issues we are forced to deal with. To swim against the tide, I believe the true power of global cooperation is being exaggerated, and there are large numbers of critical problems could not be tackled by international collaboration alone.
On the one hand, global collaboration serves not only the pure purpose of facilitating the world’s development but also the interests of flourish countries. In fact, the major of us have been misled by a misconception that all the nation could achieve a common benefit by working in partnership, and that the developed countries are willing to cut down their interests for facilitating the poor country on the road of innovation. In detail, a group of great nations could conspire to gain the soft power over the indebted nations. For instance, ODA aid has been labeled as the fasted source of support for developing countries to fuel a breakthrough in national economy. However, tied with such the official development aid is always a series of privileges lurking somewhere in many areas. In retrospect, it is no doubt that China had conspired to monopolize a new Silk Road connecting the Indochina and a large area of southeast sea. Hidden behind the guise of global collaboration in reducing poverty, China had delivered the “unclear” aid to Cambodia and Laos, then utilized the local corruption to turn two countries into debtor. At a result, two over three nations of Indochina region have to pass series of policy in favor of China in territorial issue. It is one of thousands of prime examples to prove the dark side of international cooperation.
On another aspect, international collaboration could damage the traditional values. Globalization is the sweet fruit of working in partnership on global scale. It is labeled as an inevitable result when a country desires to join a general market to sell its own products. Globalization demands each nation to leave their traditional values behind in various levels to accept a general standard of living, sometimes called American standard. When the conflicts between the old and the new come to its peak, violence, terrorism, and the collapse of humanity are inevitable. For example, international cooperation was considered the main reason of terrorism, In retrospect, the combination of a global collaboration without its long-running speculation and an extreme religious society triggered the first domino in what proved to be the Holy War. In fact, after the Cold War, the major of Middle East nations had sent their graduates to the West for studying as well as had facilitated series of global projects to be activated in their lands. Unfortunately, their students, armed with the modern technology of the West, had been poisoned by the seed of religious misconception and became the leaders of Islamic Organizations afterwards. Besides, the conflicts between the West bosses and the local workers due to the cultural differences had finally burned the dream of peace and flourish in these regions into ashes. The scholars believe that the September 11 Attack is an inevitable result of the erroneous policies in global collaboration between Muslim Countries and the West. It is more urgent than ever to pay attention on foreign affairs to avoid repeating the historic flaws.
In conclusion, human race should have a comprehensive understanding in global issues, especially in international cooperation. I declare against the idea that global collaboration could solve almost the world’s crises.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 101.0 52.1666666667 194% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3195.0 1977.66487455 162% => OK
No of words: 604.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28973509934 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95746018188 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16282327277 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 313.0 212.727598566 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51821192053 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1011.6 618.680645161 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4816158288 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.8 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.16 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154760875702 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461968524684 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576694940154 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130186010694 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069306806594 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 86.8835125448 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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