Some people believe that the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. Do you agree or disagree?
There was an ignited debate in recent years to argue for the importance of educational setting. Opponents to orthodox perspective did believe that the qualities that could pave the way for success were collected from other environments rather than traditional education. In my humble opinion, university does partly contribute to one’s sweet fruits, other required abilities come down from real-life practices.
On the one hand, current education systems are in desperate need of being reformed. Despite that fact that the concept that learning is the shortcut to eradicate the gap of the circumstances which one was born was accepted for generations, our education system is way behind on realistic expectations. Only by tackling at the root of imparting knowledge can human lay a new foundation for the next graduates who are obliged to face an endless sea of deadly issues that could threat our survival. For example, more and more universities have included computer science and soft skills in their curriculum no matter what student's major is. This move could be admitted as education’s failure amid changing realistic expectations in current context. In this light, the skeptics have the rights to declare that higher education does no longer catch the pace of time.
On the other hand, learning must be practiced throughout one’s lifetime rather than only in schooling. In fact, learning does not make one learned, or in other words, to be successful. There are those who have knowledge and those who have understanding. The first requires memory and the second philosophy. Therefore, a person have to be armed with a comprehensive understanding that it is the combination of practical experiences and knowledge schooled in educational settings to be the best way leading to the final success. For instance, Edmond Dantes in the Count of Monte Cristo who actually had enjoyed two-year of training with an Italian priest, Faria, did learn other important abilities by experiencing various lives to eventually reach his most precious success: to forgive the life and to forgive himself also. For learning is a relentless quest, each individual is obliged to cultivate practical qualities that aims to support his goals everyday in life, even as the schooling was over, instead of depending on the knowledge learned in school.
In conclusion, there is a widening gap between higher education and realistic expectation that forces the authority to pay attention. I firmly believe that humans today do no longer depend on the knowledge impacted by universities to become successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 823, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...forgive the life and to forgive himself also. For learning is a relentless quest, ea...
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Line 5, column 956, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ualities that aims to support his goals everyday in life, even as the schooling was over...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34223300971 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9539652644 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582524271845 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8338168437 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.277777778 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154012328656 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477419320689 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447728230334 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943074466536 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235636967162 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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