Most of the world's problems could be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Most of the world's problems could be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The globalization has conquering almost every corners of the known world, reversing the misconception of being divided. Human race is living in a flourish era that resulted in a utopian scenario that international collaboration could be the answer for almost the global issues we are forced to deal with. To swim against the tide, I believe the true power of global cooperation is being exaggerated, and there are large numbers of critical problems could not be tackled by international collaboration alone.

On the one hand, global collaboration serves not only the pure purpose of facilitating the world’s development but also the interests of flourish countries. In fact, the major of us have been misled by a misconception that all the nation could achieve a common benefit by working in partnership, and that the developed countries are willing to cut down their interests for facilitating the poor country on the road of innovation. In detail, a group of great nations could conspire to gain the soft power over the indebted nations. For instance, ODA aid has been labeled as the fasted source of support for developing countries to fuel a breakthrough in national economy. However, tied with such the official development aid is always a series of privileges lurking somewhere in many areas. In retrospect, it is no doubt that China had conspired to monopolize the new Silk Road connecting the Indochina and a large area of southeast sea. Hidden behind the name of global collaboration in reducing poverty, China had delivered an uncleared aid in cash to Cambodia and Laos, then utilized the local corruption to turn two countries into its debtors. At a result, two over three nations of Indochina region had to pass series of policies in favor of China in territorial issue. It is one of thousands of prime examples to prove the dark side of international cooperation.

On another aspect, international collaboration could damage the traditional values. For example, globalization is the sweet fruit of working in partnership on global scale. It is labeled as an inevitable result when a country desires to join a general market to sell its own products. Globalization demands each nation to leave their traditional values behind in various levels to accept a general standard of living, sometimes called American standard. When the conflicts between the old and the new reach its peak, violence, terrorism, and the collapse of humanity do inevitably come afterwards. In retrospect, the combination of a global collaboration without its long-running speculation and an extreme religious society did trigger the first domino in what proved to be the Holy War. Scholars believe that the September 11 Attack is an inevitable result of the erroneous policies in global collaboration between Muslim Countries and the West. It is blamed on the military aid of Soviet Union and the West for the Gulf War that fueled the rise of Islamic Organization such as Taliban or IS and the diactoship in many Islamic nations such as Syria and UAE. It is more urgent than ever to pay attention on foreign affairs to avoid repeating the historic flaws.

In conclusion, human race should have a comprehensive understanding in global issues, especially in international cooperation. I debate against the idea that global collaboration could solve almost the world’s crises.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 41.998997996 207% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 25.0 8.3376753507 300% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2837.0 1615.20841683 176% => OK
No of words: 546.0 315.596192385 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19597069597 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09904668472 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 176.041082164 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527472527473 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 904.5 506.74238477 178% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4669121649 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.347826087 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7391304348 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5652173913 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148393506481 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449581560391 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546945834863 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117374096763 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064572631832 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 78.4519038076 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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