When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and way of life die out it is pointless to keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
When it comes to technology, there is always some debatable aspects of whether its advantages outweigh the drawbacks. it seems that the most likely to be affected is the traditional lifestyle. Some people would fully abandon the traditional way of living. The writer is aware of different arguments, therefore, this essay will consider both sides and present the supporting evidence before we reach the conclusive analysis.
In some big cities where the modernization and industrialization have buried the traditional identity, their society would agree that technology is more likely to become their first choice before everything. There is no longer ethnicity acknowledgment. Take Jakarta in Indonesia for example, we barely find any traditional element that representation of the Batavian or Betawi lifestyle. However, this is not absolutely the case. If we give a visit to Tokyo, the capital of Japan, we can observe that technology can marry traditional way of living. Often the inspiration for technology advancement comes from the preserved Japanese heritage. You can easily find a robot wearing kimono in a restaurant or a busker robot playing its tribal music on the street.
Millenials, in most of the developed western countries, more likely to put the word traditional as an impediment towards technological development. While we may argue that there is a negative correlation between the chance of better technology if there is a tendency of losing traditions, eradicating tradition does not really a guarantee of better living. Therefore, there is no necessity in writing off the long-established way of living. In fact, some countries that have abandoned their traditions are seeking their old identity. There are many reasons of course, why they are looking back to their abandoned traditions, but mostly for economical reason.
Bali can give a good example for coupling technology and traditional life. Balinese are well known for observing their traditions religiously even when there are so many western tourists visiting for a trip or business. They never disagree to acknowledge the modernization but they also never had a doubt that they will continue to preserve their traditional life style. A survey conducted by sociologist reported that traditional lifestyle will likely to be beneficial to the observance as it gives them a sense of identity. The sense of identity, according to social psychologists, is important for people well-being.
In conclusion, preserving traditions in the middle of modernized cities that bombarded by the advancement of technology is imperative. Traditions are not in a position to hinder the use and inventions of technology. Moreover, traditions are our roots that give us a direction of where we came from, an identity that should be protected.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... its advantages outweigh the drawbacks. it seems that the most likely to be affect...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232365145228 0.247107183377 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.157676348548 0.155533422707 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0850622406639 0.0946595960268 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0539419087137 0.0501214627716 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0539419087137 0.0437548338989 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112033195021 0.122226691241 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0435684647303 0.0403226058552 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.1767706119 2.80594681477 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0248962655602 0.0326793684256 76% => OK
Particles: 0.00207468879668 0.00163938923432 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.107883817427 0.0861772015684 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0228215767635 0.021408717616 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0186721991701 0.011925033212 157% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2814.0 1933.35771543 146% => OK
No of words: 438.0 316.048096192 139% => OK
Chars per words: 6.42465753425 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.20517956788 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.401826484018 0.374742101984 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.319634703196 0.28420135186 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.25799086758 0.203846283523 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.212328767123 0.137316102897 155% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1767706119 2.80594681477 113% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.037074148 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.56093040696 95% => OK
Word variations: 62.0016325096 60.7387585426 102% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0891783567 149% => OK
Sentence length: 18.25 20.7743622355 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.655672121 49.517814964 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.25 127.492653851 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7743622355 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.708333333333 0.814263465372 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 50.2134703196 49.1944974215 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.4609375 1.69124875643 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286514539767 0.332605444948 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0828275342556 0.102741220458 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0678777035253 0.0668466124924 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.476649922696 0.534860350844 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119676381371 0.148594505496 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103516505078 0.134430193775 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437506687716 0.0742795772207 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349577408373 0.324371583561 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0811708130346 0.0638462369009 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193641756163 0.228012699653 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505966369913 0.058150111329 87% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 10.4468937876 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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