whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the luck is the key factor influencing successes instead of their hard work. I totally disagree with this opinion by following explanation.
There are several reason why I believe that people want to achieve a sense of satisfaction in career, they need to master vital soft skills, academic knowledge and be industrious people. For example, Steve Jobs makes significant contribution to establishing iPhone brand who spent thousands of hours coding and experimenting to figure out the great Macintosh operating system. Another example is Nick Vujicic, although he is a disability without limbs in Australia, he became a well-known motivative speaker. Furthermore, he fulfills conditions to get a bachelor degree in both accountancy and financial planning, and now he is traveling around the world to inspire to youth generation.
Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I do not support the view that people should not depend on luck to achieve their aims in their life. Firstly, perhaps people can easily pass difficulties through luck such as supporting from friends, family, but they can not appear at all times. Students copy their friend's answers during the test disregarding the concentration in study and they will fail when their teacher detect. Secondly, if people rely on luck throughout their life, they will almost certainly be disappointed. For instance, people can win a lottery in an occasion who is definitely luck since winning the lottery does not require them to do anything. Moreover, they cannot win the lottery in whole life.
In conclusion, for the reason mentioned above, i firmly hold the opinion that only when people actually obtain experience and knowledge, they progress rapidly in their career with the little need of luck.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 608, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lucked'.
Suggestion: lucked
...ottery in an occasion who is definitely luck since winning the lottery does not requ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29122807018 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83480544018 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656140350877 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0849485755 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150495418291 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536139532691 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581556772452 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839571987873 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523603017283 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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