Write about the following topic:
There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Students nowadays are under increasing pressure to achieve academic success in order to get into a good university or secure a well-paid job. For this reason, some people argue that schools need to focus on academic subjects and non-academic subjects should therefore not be taught. I would argue that while academic skills are important, schools need to teach a wide range of both academic and more skills-based subjects.
Firstly, not only should school be about teaching academic skills but also a wider range of life skills so that students can take an active part in society upon leaving school. Practical subjects can help to teach these skills to students. For example, physical education teaches students both how to work as part of a team and also the importance of being healthy. Furthermore, if cookery is taught then students will learn a great deal about health and nutrition.
Secondly, academic subjects are not equally important for all students. There is the possibility of including more vocational non-academic subjects on the syllabus like woodwork, textile design, and computing skills. By studying these subjects, students will increase their employment prospects and be better placed to secure employment when leaving school. It is important to remember that not all students will continue to higher education and school needs to enable these students to find work.
Finally, too much pressure should not be placed on students. Taking part in non-academic subjects like art, music or drama gives students the opportunity to be creative. This could help them to manage stress levels and be more productive in other areas.
In conclusion, I would argue that although academic subjects are very important, this should not be the sole focus of a school syllabus. There are a number of benefits to teaching students non-academic subjects
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26262626263 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71143089903 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531986531987 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.499094191 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6875 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5625 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302730237948 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109967889369 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746494110596 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188629121921 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522165754606 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.