You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Many people now undertake extreme activities from hang gliding to mountain climbing Why do people risk their lives in this way and do you think this is a good trend Give reasons for your answer and include an

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing.

Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Submitted by lily2002 on Tue, 09/15/2020 - 00:35

Nowadays, when people's living standards are improved significantly, there is also a rise in the diversity of recreational service to meet the public's demand. And extreme activities are one of the most loved ones when they challenge all people's sense. My following essay will clarify the reason of this trend and state my view.

At the outset, there are two reasons leading to the surge of popularity of these activities. Initially, people risk their lives to take part in owing to the desire of having more experience inside themselves. The fast pace of the modern life and working environment makes it impossible for them to doing something completely new and challeging. Howeverm joining these activities gives them a totally amazing and eye-opening experience to feel the world with different eyes and different senses. It takes them out of their comfort zone to become a more dare-to-do person, which definitely becomes the most unforgettable memories of their youth. Futhermore, this trend is also the result of people motivated by the external factors. They accept to risk their life with the aim of showing a unique photo on their social media to get attention and admiration. Besides, seeing their friends, colleagues following the trend also lead people to do everything just to keep pace with others.

From my perspectives, I strongly oppose to these extreme activities, First and foremost, it will exert a negative impact on people's health or even destroy their own life. This kind of entertainment apparently puts individuals at potential risks when they are not in a strong health enough to undertake, which results in long lasting health problems. Moreover, unexpected accidents are inevitable due to the protection equipments, making people lose their precious living. Last but not least, a rise in this trend will lead to the increase in the number of cheap businesses catering for this need, which may not follow the strict rules of protection equipments or deceiving people.

To sum up, I believe people who undertake these activities are motivated by both of the internal and external factors. And I totally disagree that this is a good trend.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, kind of, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15297450425 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78960171234 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580736543909 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1640149781 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276187797119 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869354776316 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440142964155 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167703391868 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169483210208 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, kind of, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15297450425 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78960171234 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580736543909 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1640149781 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276187797119 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869354776316 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440142964155 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167703391868 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169483210208 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.