Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing.
Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, more and more people are leaning towards activities that are very dangerous like Hang gliding and Mountain climbing. The various risks involved in such sport are explained below and concluded in the end.
On the first hand, a significant amount of people are challenging themselves and others with respect to numerous factors. People want to throw out their fears and try what they are scared of. So, some extreme personalities find some difficult and scary tasks to overcome their inner fear. At the same time, others are trying to break a certain record made earlier by someone. Also, the prime reason for increased interest in such things is because of advanced technology which now makes it much safer as compared to the past. For instance, mountain climbers now use premium quality ropes and more advanced techniques for climbing which prevents them from free-falling.
On the other hand, I really think that it's not a good idea to put yourself in unnecessary danger. But, looking at the other aspects of technology that give a chance to live life to its fullest, everyone would like to try it once. Secondly, such sports are now a good source of money for organizers and as a responsible party, they will ensure the safety of others. For example, In northern parts of India people from all over the world come here and explore the Himalayas by doing the latter activities.
To conclude, I would say that if people are not risking their life by doing extreme activities then there should not be any problems with it. Also, someone who is personally as well as mentally weak should avoid such daredevil activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, for instance, as well as, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91335740072 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51445015172 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624548736462 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9947953766 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.2142857143 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2387370578 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686009031581 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544396998038 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132788690698 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0111983115199 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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