You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples fro

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic.

Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 254 words.

The high amount of healthy problems are one of the bigger problems in last century.There is many kind of this different many kind of health issues.However, one is the problem is growing and specially effecting to young people.The obesity is became new centure's biggest problem.

Firstly,for a young and child people cosume food which content of high sugar and fat is caused healthy issues.Forbidden to this food from children is not a exact solution due the their ages.Relevant to the some kind of people believe because of government wrong and insufficient politics caused global obesity problem in children.Government should take an action for schools and foos industry.Such as in the school by lead of teacher students be able to doing regular exercise in their leisure times.In the week 2 or 3 times can be assist to lose over weight quickly and appropriate way.On the other hands,there should be regulation for school cantine meals.The school managers should be avoid purchase to content of high sugar and fat foods.They should encourage to students for eating vegetables,meats or home made breads as a sufficient amount.

Secondly,responsible is not belong to only governments.Also,parents and teachers should be more awareness to young children diet.They should be teach to them which food are they should be consume and which food are not suitable for their ages.They also must explain to the reasons in the lectures or home.Such as they can illustrated results end of the bad food habits.And with this way they can be understand the reasons

Eventually according to my opnion,both government and parents or teacher have same responsible in this issue.They should work together and rising generation in healthy and sportive.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, kind of, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28880866426 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34820759162 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559566787004 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 16.0721442886 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 92.0 20.2975951904 453% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 233.62410454 49.4020404114 473% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 488.333333333 106.682146367 458% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 92.3333333333 20.7667163134 445% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 30.6666666667 7.06120827912 434% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.01903807615 697% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159265542503 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967870502595 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561975572397 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898659098799 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482510481682 0.056905535591 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.7 13.0946893788 380% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.9 50.2224549098 -44% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.2 11.3001002004 347% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.59 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.02 8.58950901804 140% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 38.8 10.1190380762 383% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 39.0 10.7795591182 362% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.