The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some would say that the general health of the vast population will decrease in the future compared to the present. I strongly agree with this statement as the increasing rate of obesity is bringing huge problems to individuals’ health, and today’s stress makes people more fatigue.
The fact that more people are becoming obese these days is the primary cause of many health conditions that they would have in the future. This is caused by the modern sedentary lifestyle, of which individuals lack exercising while consuming too much fast food. As calories are not used, they remain in people’s bodies making them overweight. In the long term, they will be more likely to have many cardiac diseases. For example, it is estimated that 20% of American college students rarely go to the gyms and they all have highly concerned body weights.
Daily stress that happens constantly in the modern world is another factor that is damaging to individuals’ health. Science has proved that too much tension of the brain in regular life can be harmful to humans’ immune system which protects them from bacteria and infectious diseases. Therefore, the majority of the population will become vulnerable to fevers in the future as most of them are facing stress every day at work or at school. For instance, a study has shown a correlation that office workers in Ho Chi Minh City feel tired and can easily get sick all the time while they are continuously stressful even after work hours.
In conclusion, the standard of people’s health will become much lower in the future because of the current state of obesity and frequent stress in today’s world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1119133574 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77743817804 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599277978339 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7548559251 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143967719506 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535411252249 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478267735989 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104012264318 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528134346977 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.