being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problem?
Being a celebrity plays a pivotal role in man's private and social life. Many believe that it brings people many problems. On the other hand, some state it provides people with a useful source by which they can benefit and be more well-liked. In this assay, I intend to discuss that advantages of being a celebrity outweigh its disadvantages.
It is often suggested that being a celebrity is meritorious for tow fundamental reasons. For one thing, it can be far more helpful to those who want to earn a good living. For instance, imagine a world renowned sports star who has become all rage for playing in various teams. Another thing is that being a celebrity can be used as the best way to lift the poor out of poverty. As an illustration, In china, since 2000 actors and actoresses have managed to persuade their government to place a high priority on child labourors.
By contrast, there are several serious disadvantages to being a celebrity . In the first place, Although we might not like admit it, as artists are more sensitive, they are more likely to become depressed. An example may help clarify the point. Brithney spears has suffered from a rare mental illness for three years. In the second place, in the vast majority of cases, they have to accept low-bred roles out of fear of being forgotten. All in all, circumstances and current economic climate dictated that they work by all means.
By comparing and contrasting the positive and negative aspects of being a celebrity, I personally think that it's plusside is considerably more significant than its downside. To support my position, I would like to offer two different but complementary arguments. Firstly, Doctor William Austin, the head of psychology department at Oxford university asserts that becoming a celebrity offers people the advantage of being happier. In much of the world, the more people are happy the more they are energetic. The latest figures released by Ministry of Health (MOH) revealed that 70% percent of actors world wide enjoy the highest level of festivity and tranquility. In other words, being popular opens a new gateway to wonderful horizons.
On the basis of the above, it can be concluded being a celebrity brings more pleasure. However, the question is: Can it improves the welfare and health of people in general? Only time will tell, bat in the meantime it continue to influence every aspect of our daily lives. The hope is that the government provide an impressively financial and moral support for celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, well, another thing, for instance, in general, for one thing, in other words, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95754716981 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74528245879 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 176.041082164 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589622641509 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2636498298 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.08 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.96 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.48 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305301166352 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806469391969 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824888557295 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172454824699 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044494852611 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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