City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below What is the importance of the building Why should it b

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City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it.
Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below,
What is the importance of the building?
Why should it be renovated?
Suggest ways to raise funds and maintain the building in future.

Dear Sir / Ma'am,
I am Ahmed Karem, and I am one of the citizens of Cairo city. I am writing to you regarding the new decision to remove Cairo Tower which is a famous sign of Cairo.

Firstly, I would like to shed a light on the importance of this building. As you know, It was built by the Egyptian government in the 1900s that mean it is an ancient building; Moreover, It is the tallest building In Egypt. In Addition to that it shows the creativity of Egyptian's engineering.

Secondly, it is recommended that If the government can renew it, It will be better for the people who interest in such a place. Furthermore, I believe that repairing this building will afford some income for the council which can use it at the development of the city.

Finally, I will suggest that If decision-makers make some improvements at the Cairo tower such as, increase the number of restaurants and invite some famous brand, and make kids' area this will help to increase funds.

I am looking to hearing from you; your prompt response is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, in addition, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 886.0 1615.20841683 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 190.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66315789474 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75864068109 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594736842105 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 506.74238477 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0373453333 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0694401129596 0.244688304435 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.025739910634 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027165618204 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0358842890962 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200354807658 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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