City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below What is the importance of the building Why should it b

Essay topics:

City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it.
Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below,
What is the importance of the building?
Why should it be renovated?
Suggest ways to raise funds and maintain the building in future.

City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it.
Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below,
What is the importance of the building?
Why should it be renovated?
Suggest ways to raise funds and maintain the building in future.
Dear Sir / Ma'am,
I am Ahmed Karem, and I am one of the citizens of Cairo city. I am writing to you regarding the new decision to remove Cairo Tower which is a famous sign of Cairo.

Firstly, I would like to shed a light on the importance of this building. As you know, It was built by the Egyptian government in the 1900s that mean it is an ancient building; Moreover, It is the tallest building In Egypt. In Addition to that it shows the creativity of Egyptian's engineering.

Secondly, It is recommended that If the government can renew it, It will be better for the people who interest in such a place. Furthermore, I believe that repairing this building will afford some income for the council which can use it at the development of the city.

Finally, I will suggest that If decision-makers make some improvements at the Cairo tower such as, increase the number of restaurants and invite some famous brand, and make kids' area this will help to increase funds.

I am looking to hearing from you; your prompt response is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...o raise funds and maintain the building in future. Dear Sir / Maam, I am Ahmed Karem, ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he building in future. Dear Sir / Maam, I am Ahmed Karem, and I am one of the ci...
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Line 11, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... use it at the development of the city. Finally, I will suggest that If decision...
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Suggestion:
...improvements at the Cairo tower such as, increase the number of restaurants and i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, in addition, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1171.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 251.0 206.0 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66533864542 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68062237765 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561752988048 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 357.3 290.88556701 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.722584834 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6428571429 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 4.34317383033 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.29896907216 233% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385252197476 0.216113520407 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131058288534 0.0766984524023 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.220085853743 0.0603063233224 365% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191824013669 0.12726935374 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.220601529677 0.0580467560999 380% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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