you have a computer issue ask you manger to help you

Essay topics:

you have a computer issue ask you manger to help you

Dear Mr. Mike,
I am writing to you regarding an issue which I face during work. I have a problem with my computer; I do need your help to fix this problem.
The main point I want to raise is that as you know I am working as data entry employee at the production department; Therefore, I have more data to upload it in production systems such as productivity and man-hours, But my computer is working quite slowly and it hanging several times during work which effects on my productivity. Furthermore, it has an electrical problem which is suddenly shut down.
Hence, I would like to request if you can give an order to the maintenance department to tack a serious action to tackle this issue, I will appreciate that; they came and fixed it, but still the same problem as it is. Besides, I recommend that if I could get a laptop, it would be better; I can work also from home.
I look forward to hearing from you, and your prompt response is highly appreciated. Thank you in advance.
Faithfully yours,
Ahmed

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Mr. Mike, I am writing to you regarding an issue w...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...al problem which is suddenly shut down. Hence, I would like to request if you ca...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...hank you in advance. Faithfully yours, Ahmed
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...n advance. Faithfully yours, Ahmed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, look, regarding, so, still, therefore, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 836.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54347826087 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69424928432 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646739130435 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.0153651745 44.8134815571 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 92.8888888889 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 4.34317383033 256% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238965896249 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100780249284 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935467528728 0.0603063233224 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161657311079 0.12726935374 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777509413342 0.0580467560999 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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