City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below What is the importance of the building Why should it b

Essay topics:

City council is planning to pull down one of the historical buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it.
Write a letter to the city council and in your letter mention the below,
What is the importance of the building?
Why should it be renovated?
Suggest ways to raise funds and maintain the building in future.

Dear Sir / Ma'am,
I am Ahmed Karem, and I am one of the citizens of Cairo city. I am writing to you regarding the new decision to remove Cairo Tower which is a famous sign of Cairo.

Firstly, I would like to shed a light on the importance of this building. As you know, It was built by the Egyptian government in the 1900s that mean it is an ancient building; Moreover, It is the tallest building In Egypt. In Addition to that it shows the creativity of Egyptian's engineering.

Secondly, it is recommended that If the government can renew it, It will be better for the people who interest in such a place. Furthermore, I believe that repairing this building will afford some income for the council which can use it at the development of the city.

Finally, I will suggest that If decision-makers make some improvements at the Cairo tower such as, increase the number of restaurants and invite some famous brand, and make kids' area this will help to increase funds.

I am looking to hearing from you; your prompt response is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, in addition, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 886.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66315789474 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75864068109 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594736842105 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0373453333 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1 4.34317383033 279% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0694401129596 0.216113520407 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.025739910634 0.0766984524023 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027165618204 0.0603063233224 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0358842890962 0.12726935374 28% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200354807658 0.0580467560999 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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