Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school.

Essay topics:

Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school.

Some people think that school friends give more influence to a child’s success than parents. Although the existence of friends has some positive effect, I personally believe that parents give more significant effect to the child’s success.

It is undeniable that classmates play a significant role in a child success, as friends could help each other. One of the examples is when a child does not understand a lesson, he could ask a help from his friends. And then, when a child joins a sports competition, his friends might support him and give him encouragement. Despite all the positive sides, they could also bring negatives things as well. For instance, one of the classmates might be addicted to drugs, and he could influence the others to use it.

Many people believe that parents have more significant contributions to a child’s academic study than classmates. Even though they might not be giving technical advice to the child, but they give moral support. For example, a child might have some difficulties with his exam and has to study until late at night, his parents might give some motivational words that inspire him, and also stay awake to accompany the child. And then, parents will also provide all funds needed for the improvement of the child’s academic study. For instance, a child might have some problems with mathematics, and the parents might hire a private tutor for their child.

In conclusion, I do agree that school friends have some positive effect on a child’s academic performance, but I do not agree if people think that classmates give more important influence than parents. I believe that parents play more vital roles in a child’s success, as they give moral and financial support.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...friends. And then, when a child joins a sports competition, his friends might support ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10069444444 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82596869317 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465277777778 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7465365353 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.928571429 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41458254812 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163355704864 0.084324248473 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12646418336 0.0667982634062 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303970356814 0.151304729494 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13795703477 0.056905535591 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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