Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In some countries working long hours is regarded the norm. Economic success resulting from long work hours comes at a price for families, people’s health and may contribute to higher unemployment. In my opinion the long term consequences are to grave to ignore and an effort must be made to reduce long working hours.
The most serious effect of working overtime constantly is putting employee’s health at risk and causing illness, early retirement or even premature deaths. When working long hours it is more difficult to maintain a healthy life style, like finding time to exercise and relax. An unhealthy lifestyle increases the risk of heart disease, diabetes and stress related illnesses. Being chronically overworked can also cause psychological problems, like burnout, depressions or even suicides. All these health problems can cause high immaterial and material cost to society.
Another problem is the workforce’s limited time for social contacts and families. Long work hours do not make a very family friendly environment. People may find it hard to raise children and work. In particular, women may have to decide against working or having children. Because of long work hours, some employees will not find the time for a relationship or family at all and remain single. Consequently, birthrates are likely to fall, which can for example be observed in Japan. A low birthrate might leave a society with an aging population and results in many hard to solve problems.
Lastly, companies that require longer work hours will employ less people in total. It is obvious, that if people would only work regular hours more people would be employed instead of some people being overworked and other unable to find work. The society has pick up the bill for most of the cost of unemployment and the consequences of people working too much.
In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of long work hours exists only short-term. The negative effects are a burden to society. It would be beneficial if governments and companies understand the long-term cost and limit long work hours to short-term overflow work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'hours'' or 'hour's'?
Suggestion: hours'; hour's
...onomic success resulting from long work hours comes at a price for families, people&a...
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Line 9, column 62, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...t require longer work hours will employ less people in total. It is obvious, that if...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, lastly, may, so, for example, in conclusion, in particular, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26486486486 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86146662299 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559459459459 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0701489175 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6956521739 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0869565217 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3665097573 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109565518961 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956654704299 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213044896642 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119262946035 0.056905535591 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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