Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business bring about the death of local communities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today, the global establishment of supermarkets is killing small stores. Some argue that when local sellers and dealers close their businesses, the communities in that area will also die subsequently. this essay agrees to this statement because there are fewer jobs available for local residents and people cannot afford the higher price of products sold in supermarkets.
people will leave their own communities because of the scarcity of job vacancies. this is to say that local businesses provide the most job positions to the people in the area. Therefore, closing these small stores will cause residents to have less chance to secure a job. Furthermore, most supermarkets are now operated automatically with the help of robots; thus, human force is not needed in these places either. For example, many people in Binh Duong province in Vietnam had to migrate to other cities since family businesses were not able to compete with the big C markets and people became unemployed for months.
Another reason is that, even though the supply of goods from supermarkets is plenty, the products selling in these big malls are usually overpriced and out of reach for the local residents. As people cannot afford to purchase from these malls on a daily basis, a better option for them is to relocate and leave their homes behind. As a consequence, only a little number of the elderly stay and local communities become dead. For instance, a survey in Ben Tre indicated that the majority of the local population left this village because they could not find an inexpensive goods supplier and they could not afford supermarket prices either.
In conclusion, the closure of small businesses due to the competition of the large ones also kills the local communities because people can hardly find any jobs and they cannot afford to buy goods in supermarkets.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06862745098 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69636362128 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552287581699 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.051452816 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.307692308 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215674689876 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785145850236 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513103541754 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143936164751 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277894577222 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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