Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data
in exchange for access to software.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
More and more people choose to give their personal information to technology enterprises in order to gain access to software programs in return. This essay believes the advantages of this tendency do not outweigh its drawbacks. This essay will demonstrate that, although users will have a better experience with improved software, they will have their private information fully exposed.
Companies will be able to provide computer users with fully developed software platforms, which enhance their experiences, when people opt to give out information. This is to say that personal data, such as locations, hobbies and shopping routines, will allow software developers to configure and tune their products according to users’ preferences. This will then save a lot of time as well as bring convenience to people while browsing for what they want. For example, Snapchat and Instagram suggest new friends by using people’s names, mutual colleagues and acquaintances so users do not have to waste time searching. However, people can just pay more money to developers to gain access to premium products.
A huge drawback for giving out personal data is that credentials and information of people can be used for advertising purposes without their notice and consent. This is because companies cannot make enough profits for selling software, and thus, they have to mostly rely on money from advertising to support their growth. For instance, the managers of Facebook publicly admitted that they sold their network users’ information to advertisement companies and entrepreneurs to turn profits. This is seriously dangerous because private information will be exposed to potential criminals online and used for illegal purposes.
In conclusion, the fact that companies can improve their products when people agree to submit their personal data, information of these software users can be used for advertising and even committing crimes.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56040268456 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89084367671 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553691275168 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5649252119 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.461538462 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308856294016 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115866518852 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426378371939 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194112962171 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362477166037 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.