It is observed that for the survival in today's fast-paced life, people stay connected with there jobs and study. There priorities have been shifted from happiness to earning monetory facilities. Surely, a set of people think that now few people are involved in what they actually like to do or in short their hobbies. In this essay, the few factors responsible for this situation, and their affects on personalities and civilization will be discussed.
To commence with, from antiquity several forms of art and craft been developed, it take adiquate time to develop mastery in one form and make it fruitful. Hence, to be successful in life people belief that insted of investing time in these recreatinal activities, they can learn the skill which can provide them respectable positions in cooperate offices. Additionally, hobbies some time can not bring financial help to the individual, thus, to deal with livelyhood, they forbid hobbies and look for beneficial opportunities. In a recent piece of article by prominent "The Times", around sixty percent of population could not able to continue their leisure activity due to lack of resources. Consequuently, this void remains with them through the length of their life.
Firstly, there could be many detrimental effects lie on the individuals, hobbies provide an relax pastime, when people can ignore their daily stress and perplexion by focusing on their favorite activity. Secondly, plathora of ventures related to these sidelines could open new dimentions of occupations like music, sports, dancing, gaming, advanture, wildlife, and many more.However, there are many activities could also helpfull for the society like planting tress , giving education and social work, which suffer because of monetory mindset .In an empirical survey conducted by Londo's "Oxford University", ascertained that seventy percent of successful people in any field have their hobby as their work. Certainly, their happiness reflects the attitude towards their passion.
To conclude, lack of resources, time consume to learn a specific skill and no monetory help from hobbies are the few driving forces because of which people are forbidding them. It is inevitable to just ignore the psycological and social impact of this on socitey and individuals, due to increase of stress, anxity and pressure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46301369863 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92664148371 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.814924354 49.4020404114 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 142.428571429 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164230777715 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058771035994 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377862565533 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109761743841 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417129267854 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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