Few People devote time to Hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Nowadays people are marching rapidly towards digitized environment. Technologies have literally boomed attracting the younger generations by means of electronic gadgets. In recent days, there are stories published in the newspapers how children’s are influenced over the non academic interests. Surprisingly, a survey shows children’s from the age of 5 to 14 are the victims for electronic gadgets.
Apparently, every child would possess the skills in some kind of sports. Parents need to identify the talent and bring it to limelight appropriately. For few people the budding talent of their child or a student remains as a Hobby for their lifetime. This is the most essential thing for the younger generations because in later stages every individual need to have a hobby apart from their daily routine to satisfy their personal interests, happiness, physical fitness and eventually a good health.
Furthermore, corporate culture forcefully pushes the individuals to adopt a hobby. Frustration and depression is prevailing across the industries, only with the pertinent entertainment hubs and recreation clubs the companies are functioning.
However it’s all up to the individual’s perspective on spending quality time with colleagues, friends and playing a sport.
From the society perspective, I would say hobbies improve the ambience and well-being of the locality. There are many private clubs organizing environmental and safety programs which portrays the significance of cleanliness, safe driving, good health, adopting an orphanage etc .In my knowledge I have seen people promoting the Slogan “Cycle to Office”. This started with 5 members last year and now they are 350 and still counting.
All in all, hobbies are vital part of our lifestyle and it’s obvious that pros and cons depends on individuals approach.
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Essay evaluation report
Technologies have literally boomed attracting the younger generations
Technologies have literally boomed by attracting the younger generations
Technologies have literally boomed to attract the younger generations
how children’s are influenced
how children are influenced
safety programs which portrays the significance
safety programs which portray the significance
pros and cons depends on individuals approach.
pros and cons depend on individuals approaches.
flaws:
The essay is not exactly right on the topic. The structure should be something like this:
paragraph 1: introduction
paragraph 2: why few People devote time to Hobbies nowadays. first, there are no time to develop hobbies...; second, hobbies can not bring money to people....
paragraph 3: what effect this has on the individual and society in general? It is bad for individual and society in general because reason 1...reason 2..
paragraph 4: conclusion. some solutions
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 280 350
No. of Characters: 1507 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.091 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.382 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.953 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.467 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.278 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.022 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 2, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...lubs the companies are functioning. However it's all up to the individual&apos...
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Line 8, column 277, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
..., good health, adopting an orphanage etc .In my knowledge I have seen people promo...
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Line 8, column 279, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...good health, adopting an orphanage etc .In my knowledge I have seen people promoti...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['apparently', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'apart from', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281437125749 0.247107183377 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.140718562874 0.155533422707 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0778443113772 0.0946595960268 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0389221556886 0.0501214627716 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0359281437126 0.0437548338989 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0898203592814 0.122226691241 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0419161676647 0.0403226058552 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.24703750379 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0239520958084 0.0326793684256 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.107784431138 0.0861772015684 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0059880239521 0.021408717616 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0059880239521 0.011925033212 50% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1869.0 1933.35771543 97% => OK
No of words: 280.0 316.048096192 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.675 6.12580529183 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.432142857143 0.374742101984 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.375 0.28420135186 132% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.260714285714 0.203846283523 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.210714285714 0.137316102897 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24703750379 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.037074148 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657142857143 0.56093040696 117% => OK
Word variations: 78.4072391711 60.7387585426 129% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6666666667 20.7743622355 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2021755608 49.517814964 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6 127.492653851 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7743622355 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.814263465372 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 56.1666666667 49.1944974215 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.91666666667 1.69124875643 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340989337813 0.332605444948 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0822097955503 0.102741220458 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0607314652582 0.0668466124924 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.605919941847 0.534860350844 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.209237211756 0.148594505496 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129953191617 0.134430193775 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582852941298 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.208262616009 0.324371583561 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0354448397905 0.0638462369009 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190156278691 0.228012699653 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544094071286 0.058150111329 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.4468937876 77% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 64.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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