‘The older you get, life becomes more difficult,’ Discuss
Nowadays, people tend to become older very much faster compared to yesteryears. Although, there are many obvious reasons like food habits, irregular food intakes, overnight shifts and so on, it’s yet to be perceived by so many youngsters.
Apparently, the lifestyle present in 21st century is revolving around the technological advancements. Everyone is striving hard to achieve fame and to become wealthy in a very short period. In fact this kind of a social pressure persuades them to focus more on the monetary and assets rather than their health. Surprisingly, many people do not realize that their properties would not travel after their death.
On the contrary, people with less remuneration and assets are healthy and they survive longer periods as per the statistics. Life is short and we need to enjoy every moment is an honest statement from ancient days. Furthermore, live the life at this moment is what our culture follows due to which we become victims in early stages of our life. Parents need to realize that it’s inevitable to have their children along with them till their lifetime. In modern world, no child stays with their parents after 16 years. Hence, it’s essential for the parents to develop their mindset accordingly and take care of their own health and well-being.
To conclude, everyone is bound to die one day and no one is exception. People who realize this, would not worry about the old age and take the life as it moves on. Perhaps, they learn to survive in difficult times and convey the success story to their children.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The essay is not exactly right on the topic. Need to develop some reasons like: as people getting older, they are not strong enough physically; or can't follow the technological development...etc..So their lives become more difficult.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1261 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.795 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.428 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.113 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...hy in a very short period. In fact this kind of a social pressure persuades them to focus...
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'apparently', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217105263158 0.247107183377 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.161184210526 0.155533422707 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101973684211 0.0946595960268 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0493421052632 0.0501214627716 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0690789473684 0.0437548338989 158% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108552631579 0.122226691241 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0164473684211 0.0403226058552 41% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.5924867841 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0493421052632 0.0326793684256 151% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0625 0.0861772015684 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00657894736842 0.021408717616 31% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00986842105263 0.011925033212 83% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1577.0 1933.35771543 82% => OK
No of words: 263.0 316.048096192 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99619771863 6.12580529183 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20517956788 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.357414448669 0.374742101984 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254752851711 0.28420135186 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155893536122 0.203846283523 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.121673003802 0.137316102897 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5924867841 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.037074148 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631178707224 0.56093040696 113% => OK
Word variations: 70.2224601136 60.7387585426 116% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.5333333333 20.7743622355 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9844396019 49.517814964 50% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.133333333 127.492653851 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7743622355 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.814263465372 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 43.0086185044 49.1944974215 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.22352941176 1.69124875643 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132407126571 0.332605444948 40% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0672301919197 0.102741220458 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0584993698871 0.0668466124924 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.483017444492 0.534860350844 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110853027636 0.148594505496 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500011349721 0.134430193775 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348721299643 0.0742795772207 47% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310307529978 0.324371583561 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.11918920017 0.0638462369009 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843349867524 0.228012699653 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234446197324 0.058150111329 40% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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