A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defense but spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?
It is argued that the state is responsible for the safety of its people, therefore the state should spend more in security system as compare to social welfares. I completely agree, because of the rising tensions between different nations due to less supply of resources and murdering of people in the name of religion.
Scarcity of natural resources can create war like situations between neighboring countries, therefore it is essential for any nation to prepare for future clashes by improving their defense system. Natural resources are limited in quantity in this globe. Scientists of various nations are struggling to find alternative to such issues or else to make minimum use. Failure in control of such things raises the tension in the region, which latter can create problems for the upcoming generations. For instance, drinking water is precious natural resource and limited in quantity. Some countries are already dried up and they survive on filtration methods and some still have abundant supply of water to feed many generations to come. This uneven distribution of water around the world can affect the relationships of neighboring countries and results into war like situation. Thus, government should spend money in order to improve their army.
Another factor is the rising tension by killing people in the name of religion. Every belief wants to show his dominance around the world and they believe their religion is greater than others. Competition to dominate sometimes emerge into war by killing the people of other religions. Therefore, the state should increase their budget to control such hate between people of different religion. For instance, in news channels every day we listen the killing of people in the name of religion, these criminal minded people must be controlled to make the world more safer place.
In conclusion, although the social aspects for mankind are important, but the risk of war is increasing every day due to limited supply of natural resources and hatred among people in the name of religion, thus it is necessary for the authority to spend more money in defense budget to control such unwanted possibilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 559, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'safer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: safer
...le must be controlled to make the world more safer place. In conclusion, although the so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19714285714 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66853013122 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517142857143 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7977594644 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.6875 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165602468989 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561025271898 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662139254481 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107209102919 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024186991049 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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