It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be.
Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought
closer together.
Include any relevant examples from your experience.
OVER THE YEARS, THERE HAS BEEN OBSERVED A SIGNIFICANT DECREASE IN CONNECTIVITY AND SHARING GOOD BONDS OF PEOPLE WITH THEIR PARENTS, SISTERS, BROTHERS OR CLOSE ONES.IN THIS ESSAY, WE WILL THROW SOME LIGHT ON THE CAUSES OF SUCH UNUSUAL NATURE AMONGST THE INDIVIDUALS AND EMBRACE SOME REMEDIES FOR THE SAME.
FIRSTLY, MODERNISATION PLAYS A VITAL ROLE IN SUCH SERIOUS SOCIAL DISCONNECTIVITY BETWEEN THE HOMIES. INTRODUCTION OF FASCINATING TECHNOLOGIES HAVE PUT A DIRECT FORCE ON THE PUBLIC TO SPEND THEIR MAJORITY OF TIME IN THEM. IN OTHER WORDS, GADGETS SUCH AS COMPUTERS, MOBILE PHONES OR I-PADS HAVE BECOME THE MOST COMMON HAZARDS AMONGST MAJORITY OF PEOPLE TO KILL THEIR FREE TIME. AS A RESULT OF THIS, A PERSON DOESN’T GET ENOUGH TIME TO SPEND WITH THEIR FAMILY LEADING TO LOSS OF ATTACHMENT AND CONTACT WITH THEIR FAMILY MEMBERS. FOR INSTANCE, ACCORDING TO PEDIATRIC ORGANISATION OF INDIA THERE HAS BEEN OBSERVED ABOUT 60% OF DECREASE IN THE QUALITY OF PARENTING IN THE LAST FIVE YEARS. ACCORDING TO THIS SURVEY SOCIAL MEDIA AND ELECTRONIC DEVICES HAVE BEEN FOUND TO BE THE MOST COMMON REASON FOR SUCH DETORIATION IN THE QUALITY OF PARENTHOOD.
SECONDLY, THE ONGOING RAPID GROWTH IN THE ECONOMY CAN BE CONSIDERED TO BE THE CAUSE FOR IGNORANCE OF FAMILY TIME. DEVELOPMENT IN EVERY SECTOR HAS CREATED A RUSH OF ADRENALINE AMONGST THE CITIZENS.EVERY INDIVIDUAL IS SO BUSY TO GET SUCCESSFUL,EARN GREAT REWARDS AND GET WEALTHY THAT THEY HAVE STARTED NEGLECTING THEIR PERSONAL LIFE.THE RACE HAS BECOME QUITE INFLUENCIAL TO HAMPER THEIR PERSONAL RELATIONS.TO EXEMPLIFY, SURVEY ON HUMAN LIFESTYLE 2019 QUOTED THAT THERE HAS BEEN OBSERVED AROUND 80% OF INCREASE IN THE WORKING HOURS OF EMPLOYEES AS COMPARED TO 5 YEARS BACK.IN ADDITION TO THIS, THE ESCALATION IN THE TIME HAS BEEN DONE DUE TO THE DEMAND OF THE EMPLOYEES FOR THE SAME.
NEVERTHLESS, I BELIEVE THESE NEGLIGENCE FOR THE CLOSED ONES CAN BE EASILY REMOVED BY ATTAINING SOME SMALL CHANGES IN OUR LIFESTYLE.ORGANISING FAMILY GET TOGETHERS EVERY FORTNIGHT OR ONCE A MONTH CAN AGGREVATE THE CONNECTIONS. OTHER THAN THIS, SETTING UP A RITUAL TO CELEBRATE EVERY FESTIVAL TOGETHER CAN BE PROVED TO BE A EFFECTIVE INITIATIVE TO CREATE CLOSENESS AMONGST THE LOVED ONES. LASTLY, INSTEAD OF RUSHING FOR OUR WORK EVERY NOW AND THEN HAVING A PEACEFUL MEAL ATLEAST ONCE A DAY CAN HAVE A POSITIVE EFFECT ON THE FAMILY.
TO SUM UP, SMALL AND CONSTANT INITIATIVES CAN HELP TO ADDRESS THE UNNATURAL BEHAVIOUR AMONGST THE FAMILIES AND BRING THEM CLOSE TO SUPPORT EACH OTHER.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , EARN
... INDIVIDUAL IS SO BUSY TO GET SUCCESSFUL,EARN GREAT REWARDS AND GET WEALTHY THAT THEY...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 24, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this NEGLIGENCE' or 'THESE negligences'?
Suggestion: This NEGLIGENCE; THESE negligences
... FOR THE SAME. NEVERTHLESS, I BELIEVE THESE NEGLIGENCE FOR THE CLOSED ONES CAN BE EASILY REMOV...
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Line 7, column 429, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'NOW AND THEN'.
Suggestion: NOW AND THEN
...LASTLY, INSTEAD OF RUSHING FOR OUR WORK EVERY NOW AND THEN HAVING A PEACEFUL MEAL ATLEAST ONCE A D...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 414.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1038647343 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87337699629 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562801932367 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.07021448 49.4020404114 241% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.538461538 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8461538462 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142135619723 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565847025476 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547052382701 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807643800541 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240993636143 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.74 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 78.4519038076 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.