It is generally believed that education is of vital importance to the development of individuals and the well being of societies.
What should education consist of to fulfill both these functions?
Discuss and give your opinion.
It is important to consider how education plays a quintessential role in the betterment of society and individuals. Although the areas of education are broad enough, in my perspective, focus on interpersonal skills while studying can lead to personal development and the introduction of ethical and environment-related subjects can cause social welfare.
To begin with, education is the most crucial factor responsible for the development of an individual's personality. While educating, a person learns various subjects related to science, history, language, and fiction, which inculcates a plethora of knowledgeable values into them. However, this process of acquiring knowledge can be elevated by introducing interpersonal skills as part of the curriculum such as communication, management, and business skills. This is because every sector requires proficient and skilled employees with excellent presentation abilities, managerial attributes and stupendous knowledge of business values, and this can only be achieved if these attributes are learnt during the education process. For instance, during recruitment, India's leading multinational company the Tata Consultancy Services assess the applicants through a personal-skill set round with which they choose them not only on the basis of degree but also on the skills they hold.
Moreover, it is an undeniable fact that educated citizens build a healthy society. Therefore, in order to bring social prosperity, it is vital to include applied ethics and environmental science as part of the syllabus, which can further lead to harmony, less crime, and clean surroundings. Additionally, these learnings foster the ethical values in students that make them broad-minded and tolerant towards other cultures and traditions; as a result, they become responsible citizens of society. To illustrate, the government of China has made the environment subjects compulsory for secondary and tertiary education to generate awareness among students for the protection of the ecosystem. Thus, for the welfare of society, it is necessary to make these lessons mandatory to make the individuals socially cultured and ethical.
In conclusion, considering the importance of education, in my opinion, academics must constitute interpersonal skills and subjects of moral conduct to provide better development to an individual and for social well being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...r responsible for the development of an individuals personality. While educating, a person ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86285714286 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32331774231 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594285714286 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0503803683 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.846153846 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9230769231 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151321963024 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581255542728 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427452066787 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990433067182 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167354673917 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.0 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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