It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
The world needs to be the balanced combination of arts and science. Nowadays, sports and other arts field have attracted the attention of all the nations. However, it has been rightly said that talent can not be taught, it can only be chiselled.My inclination strongly supports the statement with the following arguments.
To commence with, evidently artists are born with the internal skill and interest which only requires to be identified in order to nourish and sharpen to be the best. No one can learn any skill intentionally and forcefully in absence of interest or inherent skill. To exemplify, if someone is not having a sight to visualise the beauty of an object than the person neither able to narrate it in to the poem nor able to draw its sketch. Hence, it is not possible to divert any child to be an artist. Merely teaching the types of shades and line can not create a painter within the child.
Furthermore, Arts and sports are the field which requires constant practice of their talent to be remain competitive. Abundant practice helps them to identify their flaw as well as sharpen their skills.Hence, To expect someone without having interest, to put such constant efforts would be a hype. For instance, a cricketer or any other athlete needs to keep practising even if there would not be any tournament scheduled.
On the flip side, we should realise that every child born with the unique set of qualities that only requires a broad understanding and efforts to guide and rear the children with that inbuilt skill. Children are vulnerable from mind and to teach anything forcefully can destroy his own identity that he has born with. In absence of interest and inherent skill the efforts become burden and stress for the children. For example, some children are good at studies while some are good at other arts. So, if children is good at study then they need to be encouraged to study only not to dance which is not his cup of tea.
All in all, we should accept the fact that every child has discriminative mind set and talent which can not be trained if he or she doesn't posses the interest towards it. So, I strongly believe that not every child can be taught to become artist or sportsman.
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Essay evaluation report
The world needs to be the balanced combination of arts and science.
The world needs balanced combinations of arts and science.
evidently artists are born with the internal skill and interest which only requires
evidently artists are born with the internal skills and interests which only require
in absence of
in the absence of
if someone is not having a sight to visualise the beauty of an object than the person neither able to narrate
if someone is not having a sight to visualise the beauty of an object then the person neither able to narrate
to be remain competitive
to remain competitive
flaws:
The essay is not well organized. The content should focus on the topic and your opinion. better like this:
para 1: i agree that talent can not be taught, it can only be chiselled.
para 2: Admittedly, some children (not any child) can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. it has shown that about 75% of the people are not born with specific talents but they are still managed to pay extra attentions to their weaknesses and made a change in order to become successful in certain career. Second, even people with talents still require constant practice of their talent to be remain competitive. Abundant practice helps them to identify their flaw as well as sharpen their skills. For instance, a cricketer or any other athlete needs to keep practising even if there would not be any tournament scheduled.
para 3: However, No one can learn any skill intentionally and forcefully in the absence of interest or inherent skill. To exemplify, if someone is not having a sight to visualise the beauty of an object than the person neither able to narrate it in to the poem nor able to draw its sketch. Hence, it is not possible to divert any child to be an artist. Merely teaching the types of shades and line can not create a painter within the child.
para 4: Furthermore, every child is born with the unique set of qualities that only requires a broad understanding and efforts to guide and rear the children with that inbuilt skill. Children are vulnerable from mind and to teach anything forcefully can destroy his own identity that he has born with. In absence of interest and inherent skill the efforts become burden and stress for the children. For example, some children are good at studies while some are good at other arts. So, if children is good at study then they need to be encouraged to study only not to dance which is not his cup of tea.
para 5: conclusion
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This is pattern we suggested:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here. Suppose we support side B.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. reason 1 + why reason 1 + example for reason 1 + a small conclusion for reason 1.
paragraph 4: In addition, reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
paragraph 5: conclusion.
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Need to read the topic carefully and understand what is side A and what is side B. Write two paragraphs for the side you support.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1788 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.573 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.442 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.622 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e. Nowadays, sports and other arts field have attracted the attention of all the ...
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Suggestion: My
...not be taught, it can only be chiselled.My inclination strongly supports the state...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...orn with the internal skill and interest which only requires to be identified in ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...ir flaw as well as sharpen their skills.Hence, To expect someone without having inter...
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Line 7, column 499, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dies while some are good at other arts. So, if children is good at study then they nee...
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Discourse Markers used:
['furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.212264150943 0.247107183377 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.179245283019 0.155533422707 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0707547169811 0.0946595960268 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0683962264151 0.0501214627716 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0448113207547 0.0437548338989 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10141509434 0.122226691241 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0353773584906 0.0403226058552 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55319235057 2.80594681477 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0542452830189 0.0326793684256 166% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0990566037736 0.0861772015684 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0259433962264 0.021408717616 121% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00943396226415 0.011925033212 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2236.0 1933.35771543 116% => OK
No of words: 389.0 316.048096192 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74807197943 6.12580529183 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20517956788 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321336760925 0.374742101984 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.236503856041 0.28420135186 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167095115681 0.203846283523 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0822622107969 0.137316102897 60% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55319235057 2.80594681477 91% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.037074148 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506426735219 0.56093040696 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 55.199645942 60.7387585426 91% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0891783567 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.6111111111 20.7743622355 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6615182004 49.517814964 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.222222222 127.492653851 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.7743622355 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.814263465372 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.99599198397 125% => OK
Readability: 45.2614967152 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.1935483871 1.69124875643 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323037045315 0.332605444948 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130965124927 0.102741220458 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0754495996522 0.0668466124924 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.553776450109 0.534860350844 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140198480131 0.148594505496 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130985588244 0.134430193775 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558288786919 0.0742795772207 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.313922224919 0.324371583561 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0696719952141 0.0638462369009 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204517474063 0.228012699653 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378845437324 0.058150111329 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 78.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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