It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is true that there are many people who have influence on this world dedicated most of their time for working. In my opinion, people should have a healthy life by balancing their work-life.
Firstly, in order to work more efficiently, people have to be healthy. Scientists have proven that we can only perform all of our abilities and make wise decisions when we are in good condition. For example, Putin, a Russian president, has to spend at least five days per week to do workout exercises to maintain his physical health. If a person has never played any kind of sports or participated in any outside activities, he is more likely to get some diseases such as flu, or cold. Then his performance in a long time will be affected, and he may not achieve the goal that he desired.
Secondly, everyone has their own family, therefore they should spend sometimes to take care of their parents. In this modern life, people are getting busier with their hectic schedule, most of them are working so hard to get higher salary or promotions. However, family plays an important role in everybody life. No one would want to live alone, even the wealthiest man in this world. Steve Job, for instance, a successful entrepreneur with billion in assets, said he wishes he could spend more time with his family in lieu of trying to create something to change the world.
In conclusion, I believe that people should balance their work and life to have a better life because in this life work is not everything we need.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'spend'.
Suggestion: sometimes spend
...their own family, therefore they should spend sometimes to take care of their parents. In this ...
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a billion'.
Suggestion: a billion
...nstance, a successful entrepreneur with billion in assets, said he wishes he could spen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6954887218 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52244433488 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639097744361 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1080303595 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0769230769 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4615384615 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32808543791 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119799431151 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130771405614 0.0667982634062 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254958407011 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137187406891 0.056905535591 241% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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