It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?
There is an opinion that those who go abroad are broad-minded and compassionate. I partly agree with this point of view; however, I think that the main role in a person’s attitude plays their upbringing.
First, it is true that travelling and interaction with a foreign culture broaden a person’s horizon and they naturally became more tolerant and understanding. Thus, when we are getting in touch with another culture and traditions, we are looking at ordinary things from a different angle. As a result, our perception of certain things can be changed. Especially, when an individual comes to the conclusion that other people may grow up in a distinct environment and may have a unique outlook on life. For example, I have been to India and this travel influenced me significantly. In fact, I even changed my attitude toward an arranged marriage.
However, it possible to make an opposite case because there are people who are judgmental from the begging and it seems nothing is possible to change their outlook on life. That is the reason why I believe that parenting is more important. In my opinion, our parents and teachers should teach children that a variety of cultures as well as our differences are good and have the right to exist. In addition, some things have a variety of solutions and there is no only one way to live our lives.
In conclusion, I somehow agree with the idea that travelling to foreign countries makes people more liberal and patient. On balance, however, I reckon that personal upbringing is even more important because if a child was born in a racist environment, they would have biased beliefs despite communication with other nationalities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, for example, i reckon, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97526501767 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90954587159 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575971731449 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.346789682 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8571428571 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151764143244 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489930464149 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523358028417 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930024029146 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343458512767 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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