It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people

In almost every country,for several decades it has been mandatory to serve in the military. Although the debate about compulsory military is still open, most of the countries have abolished the draft and swtiched to a volunteer military service. Protests, high cost and inefficiency have brought to this historical decision, which allow young adults to decide freely whther to enjoy the army or not. In many countries, especially in Europe, young can also decide to dedicate some months to serve the comunity. Originally regarded as an alternative to the military service, this choice has been experience a positive response form the youth.

Politicians, social scientists and officials have often critized the conscription idea, seeing it basically as a waste of time and money. On the contrary, many have underlined the positive effects of a time that young adults can use to contribute to the public good.
This is a great opportunities that young people should not pass up: they have the opportunity to learn a profession in fields like healthcare or education, they have the chance to meet new people and make useful acquaintance. Furthermore, in a society that suffers form age segregation, a period of work in the community would surely help reduce the gap between old and young generations. Research shows that bringing older and younger generations together would nurture understanding and mutual respect that benefit the individual as well as the community.

Some would rise an eyebrown when it comes to speaking about unpaid work but the truth is that young people can earn skills and collect experiences that are more preciuos than money. Giving back is something that opens your mind, makes you more compassionate and strenghten your character.

I strongly believe therefore that governments should encourage this type of activity and allocate resources to support social projects aimed to help elderly people and to serve the community. There are a lot of young with a lot to offer and a lot of problems that are waiting only to be solved. With their energy, positive attitude, focus and skills young people are a tremendous weapon against the solitutude that grips seniors lost in retirement facilities, against the garbage that pollutes our forests and rivers or against the indifference that kills homeless people on the street.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, well, speaking about, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21635883905 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80397356209 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580474934037 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7895877343 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.8 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2666666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275805804089 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708435799175 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612733629654 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131193996506 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704224403956 0.056905535591 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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