The main reason people go to work is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, double income families have become a norm in various societies with different level of social welfare. The modern life style obligates almost all people to work hard and persevere to reach their goals in their lives. To a certain extent I argue that earning money is a potent aim for people and it is a significant reason for the workforce to work, I also believe that feeling fulfil professionally in life is another thing that motivates individuals to work.
There are some main reasons why I would argue that the majority of people go to work to earn money. Firstly, all the dwellers of urban and rural areas need money for making a living. Take for example a family who lives in a metropolitan city, they need money for recreational activities such as traveling, visiting the museums, transportation and children's education, consequently one of the main reasons for the parents for going to work is to provide their children better facilities and making a comfortable life for the family. To support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that in USA more than 70% of the workforce go to work in order to earn money.
On the other hand, I believe that although money plays an important role in people's life, it is not the only important reason for accomplishing a job. Some indispensable factors such as sense of satisfaction, efficiency and usefulness are also crucial in making incentive among people. Furthermore, making friendship and communications are other reasons for doing a job. Moreover, individuals can boost their skills and gain experience through working and it gives them the opportunity to learn some interpersonal skills that are beneficial in their daily life. A salient example of this is Bill Gates who is the owner of Microsoft Company and is a multi-billionaire. Although he is in his 70s and he is affluent he works hard and believes that there are an incredible amount to learn.
In conclusion, not only earning money but also the new things people can learn while they work and the experiences they gain are the key factors that make jobs more appealing to fellows.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 770, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...d believes that there are an incredible amount to learn. In conclusion, not only e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, another thing, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92076502732 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88271047939 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532786885246 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1300904879 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.642857143 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268967381747 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977117226027 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10233146031 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164995136232 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557740904177 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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