Many companies invest their money in sport games for advertisement purposes Some people think it is good for the sport world while others believe that it has some disadvantages Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, one of the biggest marketing is through sport games. The corporate invest more money on sport games for advertisement purposes which has merits and demerits and both these sides are discussing on following paragraphs.

Sports become very famous and has many followers all over the world, which drags the companies to invest their money for marketing purpose. Sponsors can benefit the sport games by conducting matches. For an example, IPL match organizing by many sponsors and this helps to play with all the cricketers around the world. The financial support providing by the companies or sponsors is used to develop new techniques for practicing and it benefits the sports field. The cricketers can get all the facilities like the complete set of player kits and conducting the matches on well maintained stadium which are sponsored by companies.

However there are negative impacts on marketing in sport games. The sportsmen who became the brand ambassador are not getting proper time on practicing and he gets more money on marketing field which may lose interest on sport games. The sportsmen gets more fame and easily approach to offensive actions like match fixing,betting. For an example, Athletes in Alaska lost their games due to lack of practice and the athletes are trying to retain their fame by winning the games even going through unethical usage of boost medicine.

To conclude, there are disadvantages and advantages on investing money in sport games for advertisement purpose. In my opinion, advantages avail from the marketing side in sport games is more compare to disadvantages. The finance support gets more from marketing field, which helps to develop sports and can reduce the demerits by regulating the negative impact through strict laws.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (5 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1228.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 221.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55656108597 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19725445782 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574660633484 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 20.2975951904 271% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.0618493669 49.4020404114 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 307.0 106.682146367 288% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.25 20.7667163134 266% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287336153065 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188102075225 0.084324248473 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055388161353 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188102075225 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055388161353 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.4 13.0946893788 247% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.19 50.2224549098 14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.9 11.3001002004 229% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.86 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.65 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 9.78957915832 276% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.0 10.1190380762 237% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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