In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have positive or negative effects on society?

Essay topics:

In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have positive or negative effects on society?

Because of the improvements in technology, we run into an ageing society and people's life expectancy become longer than before. The demographic change shows that we all have some new lifestyle in future, even though there are many bad effects over there.

Governments should pour more money in old age pension and health care costs for the enormous amount of elderly population. It means that there are less funds for the other infrastructures like education and traffic. Young people, who represent the future, can not access to better education. Meanwhile, the ageing society imposes a burden on taxpayers. They should provide a part of fiscal revenues but meet the new problem about delaying retirement. Society can not receive many retired citizens so that governments promulgate new policy about postponed retirement. The policy has many disadvantages, which limits young people's careers and companies' productivity and profitability. As we all know, elderly people absorb new information slowly and can not use the hi-tech devices. Their slow pace of work can not create more wealth for companies and society. Specially, "empty nesters" and "shidu parents" are also needed public to take care. These kind of people need more welfare services.

Although there covers many bad influences, senior citizens also contribute extraordinarily to society. When they were young, they promote economic development hard. When they were old, their precious experiences are the valuable assets for society.

In conclusion, there are so many disadvantages about the ageing society. It limits economic development and let our life like chaos, even has made many contributions for our society.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55555555556 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94081207908 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.3098426728 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.5555555556 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 7.06120827912 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107003757078 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336597728796 0.084324248473 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034239447571 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0670108449567 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381159281814 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 40.34 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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