More and more undergraduate students are opting to work in their spare time. While temporary jobs offer several benefits, the drawbacks of this cannot be ignored. In my opinion, having a reduced job with only four hours a day can be enough for students to not abandon their studies.
The first reason why students take a part-time job is because they can become financially independent, so they don't have to ask for pocket money whenever they are in financial need. The second reason, in working in a reduced work schedule is because they can boost their opportunities of being employed by companies. In a recent report in the European Union, students that were seeking jobs immediately after finishing school had better chance of being employed if they would have previous experience. For this reason a 4 hour part-time job is of a great help for further perspective.
On the other hand, a part-time job can be distractive because students cannot concentrate on their studies while working after school. In addition to that, young students have no money management skills and hence they may end up spending their hard-earned money on useless things. In a survey conducted by e-commerce companies, students were the majority among different age group buyers.
In conclusion, there are both pros and cons in pursuing a part-time job. There are more benefits in working after school, because it can make youngsters financially independent and enables them to get valuable work experience. However, it may distract them from their studies and may even lead to expulsion from university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12692307692 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76746471463 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580769230769 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7664949095 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.538461538 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165574106474 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673219607612 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491599097884 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106930936121 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266632565497 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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