Many parents mostly mothers stay at home to take care of the house and look after children Many believe that the government should pay them a wage for this To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Many parents, mostly mothers, stay at home to take care of the house and look after children. Many believe that the government should pay them a wage for this.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A large number of parents, especially mothers, choose to stay at home and dedicate themselves to the upbringing of their children. Some people argue that they should receive payment from the government for being stay-at-home parents. I totally disagree with this notion, because I think it would be unfair for those people who do not have families and have to work.

It is true that parenting is important and those who in need have to receive financial aid from local authorities. However, being a parent and staying at home with children is a personal choice and nobody should be paid a salary just because of the fact that they have chosen to be stay-at-home parents.

Firstly, every working citizen pays taxes and expect that the government will treat them equally with the rest of the people. For instance, if I would decide to stay at home and nurture myself in order to improve my physical shape or other abilities, no one agreed to pay me a wage. Thus, from my point of view it is not appropriate to pay a salary for staying at home, whatever reason it is.

Secondly, there are some people, especially from low-income groups without tertiary education, who would prefer to give birth to a child rather than work. As well as this, some of them might spend money on luxurious things instead of proper upbringing. To illustrate, recently there was a case that parents using financial aid from our country have bought unreasonably high-priced smartphones for themselves.

In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea of paying wages for being a housekeeper. From my perspective, the government should allocate financial help only to those people who are not able to raise their children by themselves, along with stringent control of their spending.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
A large number of parents, especially mothers, choose to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...and nobody should be paid a salary just because of the fact that they have chosen to be stay-at-home par...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97306397306 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71653120176 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579124579125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4556135102 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.615384615 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247393597917 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937769791597 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530471650241 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14277876504 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552108985307 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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