Music should not be taught in schools instead other subjects such as computer and science should be taught Do you agree or disagree with this statement

We are living in an era that education has a significant importance. Therefore, the methods of teaching and the subjects in the curriculum have been subjected to debates. Due to the technological advancements in recent years, many people believe the teaching of older courses such as music should be abandoned and replaced by modern subjects like computer and science. I strenuously disagree with the said view.

There is no doubt that science and computer are important. Firstly, in this modern world, where technology dominates over people’s lives, computer literacy has gained an unprecedented prominence. Hence, it is almost vital that these courses are in the educational curriculum. Secondly, the world is moving forward in industrialization with a fast pace, and therefore, having practical scientific and computer knowledge helps students to be more successful in their future careers.

However, the value of classical courses, namely music, should not be disregarded. First and foremost, in this ever-changing era, culture and arts should be preserved. It should not be forgotten that there is a softer side to the intellectuals we call humans. Moreover, by removing music from schools’ educational schedule, the talent of many students will be never discovered- the talent that may direct children to a lead a prosperous life. Last but not least, the music industry is a multibillion-dollar industry, thus, teaching music in schools can be considered as well a practical course that prepares students for an alternative career.

To conclude, based on the aforementioned explanations, while acquiring computer and science knowledge are crucial, I disagree with the statement that other subjects such as music should be removed from schools. As both the former and the latter are equally important, both should be taught in educational institutes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'will' and 'be'.
Suggestion: will never be
...l schedule, the talent of many students will be never discovered- the talent that may direct ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54006968641 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23403515061 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2056125587 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428228784914 0.244688304435 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125970931987 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914873704357 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253913116113 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114241435953 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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