Music should not be taught in schools. Instead, other subjects such as computers and science should be taught. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
I agree with the statement that computer and science should be taught in the schools instead of music. I hold this opinion for a couple of reasons.
First, learning computer and science seems to be more crucial than learning music because it helps students to obtain useful skills. For instance, my brother learned computer, especially programming, when he was in the high school. After starting college, he landed a part-time job in a computer company. Indeed, this skill helped him to make living.
Next, if the music is taught in the schools, students would not have enough enthusiasm to spend time on other courses such as computer and science. For example, when I was in the high school, we had a painting course on Wednesdays. Although we had other courses in our schedule for that day such as mathematics and chemistry, we just paid attention to painting class and did not have any interest in other courses because that was more enjoyable. Therefore, teaching music or other artistic courses to students could be distracting for them.
Eventually, learning computer and science should be a high priority for students because these fields are important requirements for universities that they might apply for in future. For instance, when I applied for civil engineering department in our university, my scores in mathematics and computer science were very appreciable to get admission.
As it is mentioned above, learning computer and science is more beneficial than music. Hence, these courses have to be taught instead of artistic coursed such as music.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1314.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1328125 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73986056899 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53515625 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0054141116 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8571428571 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309100087095 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126959104236 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157449133732 0.0667982634062 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223069666376 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150806290114 0.056905535591 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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