Music should not be taught in schools Instead other subjects such as computers and science should be taught Do you agree or disagree with this statement

In this current competitive world, many subjects are losing their importance due to inclination in popularity of other ones. Certain people believe that Music should not be a part of education in schools but the institutes should focus mainly on teaching the children about computers and science. This essay will discuss as to why it is also as beneficial as other subjects for the students and their mental development.
Many individuals consider music to be unnecessary for the students because they believe it to be merely a waste of time leading to unemployment of a candidate. Moreover, the employees are appointed on the basis of their qualifications in academics and not in other curriculum activities like music, dance, et cetera. In addition, their allotment into school time-table will have adverse effect on the concentration of the pupils resulting in lowering their grades which will further affect their career in future. For instance, most of companies, whether national or international, appoint they staff by looking into their marks certificate neglecting any other personal talents they possess. Thus, it is not in the favor of pupils to learn music in schools.
However, I believe that there is a need to include music in the school schedule since it is a good source of recreation that will help the children to overcome the stress from their monotonous routine. As a result, they will be feeling relaxed and able to focus on other subjects more intensely that may help them to attain good grades. For example, the pupils' of the schools with extra-curriculum tasks are generally found to be more active in their academics than those which do not possess the same. That is why; music should be added to the time-table of the school.
In conclusion, this essay discussed why every subject has its own importance in deciding the future of students. In my opinion, each subject has its own role in everyone’s life.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the companies') or simply say ''most companies''.
Suggestion: most of the companies; most companies
...t their career in future. For instance, most of companies, whether national or international, app...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04361370717 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86117017597 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548286604361 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5210337816 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.642857143 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221460786774 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843753141314 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616023989109 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138169029273 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667586400568 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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