Nowadays many mothers take care of the family and don't go out to work. Some people believe they should be given salaries by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Opinions are divided on whether homemakers should be paid salaries for taking care of their families. I believe that this should not be the case, as it would create a sense of injustice in society.
Although it is a widely held belief that the government should support housewives for their household duties and family responsibilities by granting monthly allowances, in practice, this would be grossly unfair to employed women. This is due to the fact that working ladies have to also take care of their families, as well as their job responsibilities. If the government would offer benefits to only one group, and neglect others, then it would spread the feeling of unfairness in society. In addition to this, those women who choose not to work and stay at home for elderly or child care, do so with their personal choice. For these reasons, it would be inappropriate to remunerate the unemployed mothers.
In fact, far from being beneficial for the community, there would be adverse future implications of paying jobless mothers. The most serious of which would be related to widened sex ratio gap at workplaces and loss of educational value. With regard to the former, most women would prefer to quit their jobs when given financial aid from the government for family care and being jobless, which would lead to a fewer number of women employees in the fields of medicine and technology as compared to men, and would create male-dominated societies. Loss of interest in education would be another consequence of paying unoccupied mothers, as most of the young females would have the assurance of future financial support from the government, they would start neglecting their studies knowing this fact, and as a result, educational value for women would be lost. These detrimental facts make it less important that government should provide financial benefits to homemakers.
In conclusion, I disagree with this viewpoint that jobless mothers should be given salaries for taking care of their families because it would bring injustice, especially to the women workforce, and would have serious drawbacks in relation to the imbalance in gender ratio and loss of educational value.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, well, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80592585009 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.0294397551 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.230769231 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171743461351 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782181671508 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463870951817 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143822120616 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412145193838 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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