Nowadays older people often live in retirement homes with people of their own age instead of living with their children Is it a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

Nowadays older people often live in retirement homes with people of their own age instead of living with their children. Is it a positive or negative development?

In recent times, it has become very common that older people instead of living with their families, they usually reside in old age homes with others of the same age group. In my opinion, it is a negative development for our society and family foundation. This essay will consider some major negatives in further discussion.
Firstly, after retirement, these people are dependent on youngsters for various activities. At the age of sixty or more, it is expected to have health issues which demand regular and proper checkups and follow-ups. Hence, they require their children rather than people of the same age. Furthermore, many officials work like bank accounts maintenance or pension collection, demand in-personal facility so to complete such activities some family member should always escort them to their destination.
Secondly, the movement of senior citizens from home to retirement homes has weakened the family's strength. Elderly people have experiences of different situations in life. With their guidance young generation can easily cope with obstacles in life. Additionally, elder people strengthen the bond of family and society with their patience and life lessons. For example, during childhood, grandparents tell different stories to their grandchildren which helps to develop moral values in them.
To conclude, older people are an essential part of family and society. Their guidance and experiences do not only help in strengthening family relationships but also help to fight some adverse situations of life. Thus, they should be kept with family not other people of their own age.

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Average: 7.1 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion: Thus,
... fight some adverse situations of life. Thus they should be kept with family not oth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.416 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78394252814 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0489661651 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416779448581 0.244688304435 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128960258489 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104567130095 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248376182073 0.151304729494 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076565028537 0.056905535591 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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