Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.
What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?
In the modern world, parenthood has become a discussed topic. People believes that children suffer exaggerate pressure from their parents to prosper in life. In the essay below I will further explain the reasons for this attitude and give my point of view.
The main reason for this attitude from parents is due the competitive environment that our society created. In this environment people have to succeed, they aim to get to the top all the time in all aspects of their lives. For instance, baby’s parent tend to overstimulate them to talk, walk or eat before the average. In addition, when children achieve the school age, they expected high grades or awards. Moreover, in high school they expected their springs to be chosen by a top university. Furthermore, as young adults they expected good jobs and a good spouse.
In addition, some believes that another reason for that is because parents desire that their children succeed in aspects that themselves was not able to do well, and this triggers another problem, that is the parents obfuscated their children own desires or they do not respect their children individuality.
Some parents believe that this approach motivate children to always pursue their best performance. Furthermore, this method will help them to develop fast and efficiently. For example, parents believe that this attitudes in high school will help their children study more and reach good grades, as a result this will lead to a good university nomination.
On the other hand, some studies shows that this kind of approach can triggers stress, eating disorders, anxiety and even depression. Some psychologists explain that this attitude can lead to a frustrate individual once it is quite hard to succeed all the time. Therefore this can develop adults that are disturb or unhappy with their own achievements.
To conclude, some parents tend to exaggerate on their expectations for their children realizations. Despite this can be seen as an efficient approach, it is important to respect their children individuality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22522522523 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77297368844 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504504504505 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8768886982 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05555555556 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38491358056 0.244688304435 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124865255251 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798784073877 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224013473837 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552467312384 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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