Nowadays people buy a lot of things even though they don’t really need them.
Why is it happening, in your opinion? Is it a positive or negative trend for the individual and the society?
Nowadays, advertising turns into a profitable industry all over the world and it could dominate almost all aspects of human's lives in various ways. People are more interested in shopping and sometimes buy dispensable items that they do not even need. I believe this is the impact of adverts that could manipulate people's mind and tempt them to buy more things. While it could improve the economy of different nations, I believe that the negative effects are not only on the budget of the family but also on children's health.
In today's competitive business market companies need a way to introduce their new products to their customers and it is possible for them by advertising their new commodities. Furthermore, they try to convince individuals that they would live a happier life through purchasing new items and thy entice people to buy unnecessary things. To support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that England could boost the economy of the country in 2008 by increasing the advertisements on TV, Radio and internet.
There are various reasons why I would argue that this is a negative trend. Firstly, the majority of these adverts target the children who are vulnerable and can be influenced by the ads easily by showing sharp and attractive colors that touch their heart. Consequently, children put pressure on their parents by nagging or pestering to force them buying unhealthy products that have detrimental effects on their health such as fast food. A salient example of this is the MacDownald Company that boosts its income up to 60% by advertising on TV and in the middle of children's programs. Secondly, it would be a severe threat to the budget of the family who are impressed by these ads and buy unnecessary items.
In conclusion, advertisement industry brings a large amount of money for companies. Although it provide more job opportunities for the people, it threats the family's budget and health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...unt of money for companies. Although it provide more job opportunities for the people, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02121212121 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79547877135 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8034737417 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.357142857 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152514700852 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549978949011 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552816201564 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864545268109 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306853544556 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.