You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.Write a letter to your tutor. In your letterdescribe the situationexplain why you cannot continue at this timesay what action you woul

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You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.
Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter

describe the situation
explain why you cannot continue at this time
say what action you would like to take

Dear Mr.Imani,

I am writing with regard to a part-time course that I cannot attend due to several problems that I have encountered.

My Name is Rahi Honarvar and I took a course in computer science and technology in the Alef institute, last December. As I mentioned in my registration form I have a full-time job as well. Unfortunately, I have to go on a mission to Russia and I would be far away for a few months.

The company that I am working for is going to sign a contract with a client that is in Russia and consequently, I have to go overseas in order to negotiate the terms and conditions.

While I was surfing your website I realized that there would be exactly the same course in the next 6 months. I would like to know if it will be feasible for me to take that course instead of the current course.

I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible and sorry for any inconvenience that I may have caused.

Yours faithfully,
Rahi Honarvar

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Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Imani
Dear Mr.Imani, I am writing with regard to a part-...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... negotiate the terms and conditions. While I was surfing your website I realized t...
^^^^^
Line 16, column 2, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Yours faithfully, Rahi Honarvar I
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, look, may, so, well, while, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 806.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45303867403 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81400475349 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569060773481 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 254.7 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.7594726894 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5555555556 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 4.34317383033 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145111836285 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564738240997 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433842347817 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706503951074 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388497334263 0.0580467560999 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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