Nowadays, people living in large cities face many problems in their dayly lives. What are these problems? Do you think that
the government should encourage people to move in smaller towns?
In an ancient era, people's lives were too much complicated, they struggled to survive. Later on, according to the modernization theory, industrialization and then urbanization eliminated poverty in urban areas,greater productivity simultaneously raised, improving people's living standard, facilitating a huge manual job, the poverty was decreased to the minimum , as a result, people have moved and settled in these urban places. These days, a great majority of people have chosen to live in great cities, facing numerous issues in everyday lives which will be examined by this essay , from my perspective, the government should provide proper people's living standards and reduce poverty in rural area , in this case, people will opt to live in their local areas.
It seems undeniable that major cities's standard including educational , promoted medical care , employment, all of these attract migrants because everyone to ensure financial circumstances for their family, relatives. Thus, many people in the countryside migrate to great cities, resulting in an increase in the demands for accommodation, food, and services in urban area. The cities of today are finding it extremely difficult to accommodate with the increasing inflow of imigrants . A great number of urban problem spring from the heavy concentration of population in a limited space, hence, problem of housing, poverty cannot be remained without attention of sociologists, economists, political scientists. In addition, one of the major consequence is pollution - pollution of land, pollution of water, pollution of environment, these problems are burdens, which urbanites should carry . By funding a variety of ecological organizations, governments in cities decline the level of pollution, however, these repercussions could be better.Moreover, a large influx of people from villages, small country side areas create a totally different social atmosphere in the cities and acculturation of migrants is a common response, but sometimes, conflict exert detrimental influence on surrounding neighbors.
In my opinion, the key to solving immigration issue is to enhance people's living standards in countrysides,for instance, to develop educational system, health care system, shopping malls, to introduce more public modern vehicles. Depriving people's lives from intolerable living cond ions, the governments provoke rural individuals to remain in local areas. For example, In the USA, a great proportion of people choose live in own locations, because every state of America has suitable living condition, compared with Russian living condition in cities.
In conclusion, instead of living in local areas , plenty of people moved to live in urban areas, where they create adverse concentration in restricted place, causing different type of pollutions. Consequently, a majority of citizens endure littering polluting environment which damage their health.
Comments
Cities are growing rapidly as
Cities are growing rapidly as population is increasing in every country. More people means more problem will arise, it doesn’t mean that smaller town has less problem. Individual city is having their own problem. There are quite lot of problems which are arising now a days. For example, education, poverty, environment and so on.
Let’s start with education, one of the biggest problem in my country. Children’s are not getting proper education during their childhood. Due to more population, competitions are getting increased each and every school. Also, now a days, private school fees are so high that medium income family can't afford it. Though they have talent, chances are very less.
Even if they get chance, unable to continue due to the financial problem. Another changes i have noticed in rural area that, if older brother didn’t get chance, parents think that younger brother also would not get chance. Due to all these, literacy level is decreasing which is a big problem in large city.
poverty, another daily lives problem in every city. More number of families are there whose income less than poverty level. People are getting into bad situation and they are trying to do bad things. For example, crime has increased a lot than past. One of the main reason for this is poverty. They are looking for money to run their family but they don’t have job to earn it, so doing bad activity.
other big issue, environment problem, major problem in our current world. Big cities are allowing all big industries to set up their industry to bring more work, money. i wouldn’t disagree with government, but these industries are not cleaning / maintaining the environment. Due to these, environment is getting polluted, people are suffering with lot of unknown. diseases. Also, people are using their own vehicle to travel, which are generating lot of carbon, polluting the environment.
Another problem, traffic, which is terrific now a days. People are not following the rule. For example, when i come to office daily, can see, lot of vehicles are going through the restricted area. No one is there to stop and most people are taking same route. Though, traffic polices are there in each traffic, unable to control it due to the huge crowd.
let’s talk about small town, in my opinion, small town means small area and less people. In spite of having less people, they are also having same kind of problems. In small town, people will have less opportunity compare to big cities. Getting good school would be difficult even having good talent. No of jobs will be lesser, will be difficult to get the job.
In the conclusion, i would not agree that people should move to small town as same problem will persist while more people will be moving. Instead, people should understand, what should be done to overcome those problems. without resolving problem, all cities will be same.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.3376753507 312% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 428.0 315.596192385 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82009345794 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21566075766 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605140186916 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 506.74238477 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.6150389104 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.928571429 106.682146367 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5714285714 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274484742782 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889503064387 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458202700473 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161434969135 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041312205496 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 15.65 50.2224549098 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.3001002004 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.07 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.84 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 78.4519038076 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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