Nowadays shopping has become a new favourite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? Should they be encouraged to develop other hobbies? How?
In this materialistic world, with the rise in high disposal income young age group bargain their leisure time at high extent in super malls, online e shopping and etcetera. Although, it is essential part of life to live stress free and entertaining. However , the youth generation should be inclined towards recreational and co curriculum activities, outdoor and Indoor games as well as indulging in voluntary acts. This essay will illustrate a possible reason of addiction towards shopping with a noteworthy ways through which they can be transferred to other activities.
Primarily, the main significant factor of exponential upwards towards buying and selling in futile times is owing to the rise in expenditure with an income on an equal proportion. Evidently, the western cultures and working atmosphere influence to purchase of commodities. Similarly, young people are developing as well as becoming innovative for that reason they have acquired skills which they use on occupations and resultantly earning reasonable amount then their past. Moreover, automation also play a paramount importance through online availability of goods and services with ease of affordability and in less time. Simoultaneusly, youngsters while working, commuting, studying or eating can use the exclusive features of online brand store and can avail the items they needed around the clock.
Contratingly, it is needless to say that they should devote their necessary time on establishment of varied things such as volunteering for a specific community to develop moral values, ethics and team spirit. Moreover, they should perform in sports to enhance their abilities and physical growth of body. For instance, joining for a membership in nearby recreational centres during weekends provide so many activities to perform such as swimming, workout, spa, aerobic classes and so many entertaining things on a single day pass or yearly passes. Hence, providing information in schools and colleges to stimulate them to make productive use of their spare time.
By hammering last nail, I pen down by saying that gradual rise in personal income and western culture influence most young groups to devote their time in shopping malls whilst educational institutions broaden their way to get use of their free time in an efficient way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...their way to get use of their free time in an efficient way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46111111111 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96813855068 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627777777778 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8096892968 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.428571429 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192370891863 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595102801717 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670593705325 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105857803864 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438362985114 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In this materialistic world, with the rise in high disposal income yo...
^^
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ve stress free and entertaining. However , the youth generation should be inclined...
^^
Line 1, column 511, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'way'?
Suggestion: way
...tion towards shopping with a noteworthy ways through which they can be transferred t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 639, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bility and in less time. Simoultaneusly, youngsters while working, commuting, st...
^^
Line 5, column 677, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y, youngsters while working, commuting, studying or eating can use the exclusive...
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Line 9, column 277, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...orm in sports to enhance their abilities and physical growth of body. For instan...
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Line 9, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...es to perform such as swimming, workout, spa, aerobic classes and so many enterta...
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Line 9, column 559, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...single day pass or yearly passes. Hence, providing information in schools and col...
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... By hammering last nail, I pen down by saying that gradual rise in personal...
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...pen down by saying that gradual rise in personal income and western culture infl...
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Line 13, column 125, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and western culture influence most young groups to devote their time in shopping ...
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Line 13, column 253, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...their way to get use of their free time in an efficient way.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46111111111 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96813855068 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627777777778 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8096892968 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.428571429 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192370891863 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595102801717 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670593705325 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105857803864 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438362985114 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.